Not Dead Yet - Chapter 5 - Revision history

PelicanGaming: /* Part 3 */

2024-09-13T00:48:18Z

‎Part 3

PelicanGaming: /* Part 2 */

2024-09-13T00:16:57Z

‎Part 2

PelicanGaming at 00:07, 8 September 2024

2024-09-08T00:07:22Z

PelicanGaming at 00:20, 12 July 2024

2024-07-12T00:20:11Z

PelicanGaming: /* Part 2 */

2024-07-11T23:36:23Z

‎Part 2

PelicanGaming at 21:43, 16 September 2022

2022-09-16T21:43:35Z

PelicanGaming: /* Back in Berryshire */

2022-09-16T21:41:51Z

‎Back in Berryshire

PelicanGaming: /* Part 2 */

2021-05-16T19:34:12Z

‎Part 2

PelicanGaming: /* Part 2 */

2020-04-30T16:42:24Z

‎Part 2

PelicanGaming: /* Part 2 */

2020-04-30T16:39:45Z

‎Part 2

@@ Line 181: / Line 181: @@
 "Water," he managed to get out in a deep, gruff but exhausted voice.
-Grabbing mug and a carving knife just in case, Griegg hurried over and handed the mug over.
+Grabbing a mug and a carving knife just in case, Griegg hurried over and handed the mug of water over.
-"You won't need the knife, though your door is helpful, I wouldn't have the strength to fight you even if I wanted to. And I don't want to fight, I need help. I'm a Landless." He pulled from his waist belt a disk of marble with the Landless Declaration on the front, instructing anyone to welcome provide whatever necessary within means to the person holding this disk.
+"You won't need the knife, although your door is helpful, I wouldn't have the strength to fight you even if I wanted to. And I don't want to fight, I need help. I'm a Landless." He pulled from his waist belt a disk of white marble with the Landless Declaration on the front, instructing anyone to welcome and provide whatever necessary within means to the person holding this disk.
-Griegg turned the disk over to see the owner's ID. An etching of the face of the humanoid beast smiled awkwardly, clearly an etching from several years prior.  "So, you're name is Turvin?"
+Griegg turned the disk over to see the owner's ID. An etching of the face of the humanoid beast smiling awkwardly, clearly an etching from several years prior.  "So, you're name is Turvin?"
 The creature apparently called Turvin nodded as he drank the refreshing cold water.
@@ Line 191: / Line 191: @@
 "Sorry, not to be rude, but what are you?" Griegg had never seen anyone quite like this guy.
-Turvin choked and chuckled. "What am I? Now that's a good question. I'm a mix: humon for starters, then thrown in wolf, lion, falcon, shame I didn't get the wings," he added sidely. "And some other things I haven't figured out. Apparently my ancestors were open minded." Turvin did indeed have a strange look, the build and nose of a large wolvienn, but almost the mane of a lion, and the eyes and feet of a falcon, but grey as a storm cloud.
+Turvin choked and chuckled. "What am I? Good question. A mix: humon, for starters, then thrown in wolf, lion, falcon, shame I didn't get the wings," he added as an aside. "Some other things I haven't figured out. 'Parently my ancestors were open minded." Turvin did indeed have a strange look, the build and nose of a large wolvienn, but almost the mane of a lion, and the eyes and feet of a falcon, but grey as a storm cloud.
-"I was in the forest to the South, woke up yesterday to a stench like nothing I'd ever smelled before, worst thing ever." Several people were now standing around listening to the story of this stranger, including Raain, Arun, Nik, and Tedd,  who understood the smell Turvin was referring to. "I packed up in a hurry and ran towards the open plains. But I was deep in the forest, it wasn't a short run. As I ran, I noticed the forest wasn't glowing as brightly as it should be, the blues were dull. Like the forest was dying."
+"I was in the forest to the South, woke up yesterday to a stench like nothing I'd ever smelled before, worst thing ever." Several people were now standing around listening to the story of this stranger, including Raain, Arun, Nik, and Tedd; Tedd understood the smell Turvin was referring to. "I packed up in a hurry and ran towards the open plains. But I was deep in the forest, it wasn't a short run. As I ran, I noticed the forest wasn't glowing as brightly as it should, the blues were dull. Like the forest was dying."
 Tedd broke in, "I smelled something a few days ago as we traveled to the Sanctuary, but couldn't see any evidence of source."
@@ Line 203: / Line 203: @@
 "I suspected as much, this Lodge is famous." Turvin paused and looked closer at Griegg, then suddenly moved a lot closer, looking him deep in his eyes. "You were dead, or so I was told."
-"Apparently no one told me I was supposed to be dead until I got back here a few days ago." Even more unease set over Griegg.
+"Apparently no one told me I was supposed to be dead, until I got back here a few days ago."
 "Glad you're alive, I wanted to make a Landless out of you."
@@ Line 209: / Line 209: @@
 Griegg stood, shaking his head, "Matthew wants that too, but I have too many responsibilities here."
-"The Eternals usually gets what they want in the end. You'll help me save the valley's water and forests, and I'll help you find your assassin, and then you can join our ranks. Maybe take the Hobb, too." Arun went red.
+"The Eternals usually get what they want in the end. You'll help me save the valley's water and forests, and I'll help you find your assassin, and then you can join our ranks. Maybe take the Hobb, too." Turvin turned to Arun who went red.
-"Me? a Landless?!" Arun was starting to feel like suddenly everyone around him was making plans for his future and he was just going to be forced into whatever chaos life was going to throw at him. "I, I never thought about becoming a Landless," Arun lied, he had thought about it and was terrified of the idea of not having a place to call home, of being constantly on the move, of relying on strangers to hopefully honor the Declaration instead of slitting his throat like some places do that don't like being forced to accommodate these ruffians. Landless were viewed often less favorably than Wildlings: similar in poverty as the Landless, but with less travel and more reliance on the land rather than taking from communities they passed through.
+"Me? a Landless?!" It seemed, suddenly, everyone around Arun was making plans for his future and he was just going to be forced into whatever chaos life was going to throw at him. "I, I never thought about becoming a Landless," Arun lied, he had thought about it and was terrified of the idea of not having a place to call home, of being constantly on the move, of relying on strangers to hopefully honor the Declaration instead of slitting his throat like some places do that don't like being forced to accommodate these ruffians. Landless were viewed often less favorably than Wildlings: similar in poverty as the Landless, but with less travel and more reliance on the land rather than taking from the communities they passed through.
 "How did you come to be in this condition?" Griegg asked.
-"Hhorq," Turvin repliced gravely. He pulled out of his pocket a red cloth, stained in blood, bearing the spiked tree that belonged to the hhorq tribe that for so many decades claimed the lives of the Berryshire, Mayhart, and Oldlake residents, and travelers. There was only one way that Turvin could be in possession of this cloth: "The tribe attacked me as I ran, they are all dead, except the chief, whom fled."
+"Hhorq," Turvin replied gravely. He pulled out of his pocket a red cloth, stained in blood, bearing the spiked tree that belonged to the hhorq tribe that for so many decades claimed the lives of the Berryshire, Mayhart, and Oldlake residents, and travelers. There was only one way that Turvin could be in possession of this cloth: "The tribe attacked me as I ran, they are all dead, except the chief, whom fled."
 The barroom had gone completely silent as soon as the cloth has been pulled out, but a slow murmur started to grow, and then was suddenly broken with cheers and shouts and applause. This was a victory for the entire valley. Nabal ran out of the bar to ring the bells, shouting as he ran, "The hhorq are dead! A Landless killed them all!"
@@ Line 229: / Line 229: @@
 "You fought them your whole life, I'm sorry the victory was taken from you," Turvin said, putting the cloth back in his pocket, later he would find a way to incorporate it to his armor, as is the Landless tradition.
-Nabal came running back into the lodge, and tripping over Turvin's feet, rolled down the hall knocking over a few people that hadn't left with Nabal to go tell their families and neighbors that weren't there for the news of the hhorq threat being eliminated.
+Nabal came running back into the lodge, and tripping over Turvin's feet, rolled down the hall knocking over a few people that hadn't left with Nabal to go tell their families and neighbors that weren't there the news of the hhorq threat being eliminated for once, after generations.
 Talur helped Nabal to his feet, as Raain and Griegg helped Turvin into the main barroom to take a seat. Arun brought him an ale and plate of elk meat from the elk at the Sanctuary.
@@ Line 247: / Line 247: @@
 Jericho laughed, "Me? Oh yes, now you want my voice for magic rather than entertainment."
-"Yes, we do want your magic," Griegg said with the sarcasm Raain had.
+"Yes, we do want your magic," Griegg said without the sarcasm Raain had.
 "Sounds good!" Jericho slammed the table with one paw and downed his ale with the other. Whipping his lips with the back of his paw, he said, "When do we leave?"
@@ Line 253: / Line 253: @@
 "As soon as possible," said Turvin.
 Nira tented to Turvin's remaining wounds, Talur took Turvin's armor to the town smithy for repair, Tedd and Arun readied Lemon and the cart, Griegg and Raain discussed plans of route to take to the Falls: whether to follow the river upstream or go around the mountain to the top and straight to Eva's Temple. They decided that having as much information as possible would be best, there was time before the waters got to Berryshiretown and another week before the water reached Oldlake. And they hoped they could avoid seeing the Valswynn.

← Older revision		Revision as of 00:16, 13 September 2024
Line 176:		Line 176:


		+	==Part 3==
	Over the course of the breakfast period, forty-seven people were served, mostly locals. But near the end of the meal, the doors burst open and stumbled in a tall, beastly hairy creature, gasping as he hit the floor in relief as the healing symbol over the door glowed brighter than it had ever done before. With a great sigh as the glowing sigil faded back to normal, the hairy beast rolled over onto his back, propping himself against the wall opposite the door.		Over the course of the breakfast period, forty-seven people were served, mostly locals. But near the end of the meal, the doors burst open and stumbled in a tall, beastly hairy creature, gasping as he hit the floor in relief as the healing symbol over the door glowed brighter than it had ever done before. With a great sigh as the glowing sigil faded back to normal, the hairy beast rolled over onto his back, propping himself against the wall opposite the door.

← Older revision		Revision as of 00:07, 8 September 2024
Line 1:		Line 1:
−	~~[[Category:Story]]~~[[Category:Not Dead Yet]]	+	[[Category:Not Dead Yet]]
	[[Not Dead Yet - Chapter 1\|Chapter 1]] \| [[Not Dead Yet - Chapter 2\|Chapter 2]] \| [[Not Dead Yet - Chapter 3\|Chapter 3]] \| [[Not Dead Yet - Chapter 4\|Chapter 4]] \| [[Not Dead Yet - Chapter 5\|Chapter 5]] \| TBC		[[Not Dead Yet - Chapter 1\|Chapter 1]] \| [[Not Dead Yet - Chapter 2\|Chapter 2]] \| [[Not Dead Yet - Chapter 3\|Chapter 3]] \| [[Not Dead Yet - Chapter 4\|Chapter 4]] \| [[Not Dead Yet - Chapter 5\|Chapter 5]] \| TBC

← Older revision		Revision as of 00:20, 12 July 2024
Line 1:		Line 1:
−	[[Category:Story]]	+	[[Category:Story]][[Category:Not Dead Yet]]
	[[Not Dead Yet - Chapter 1\|Chapter 1]] \| [[Not Dead Yet - Chapter 2\|Chapter 2]] \| [[Not Dead Yet - Chapter 3\|Chapter 3]] \| [[Not Dead Yet - Chapter 4\|Chapter 4]] \| [[Not Dead Yet - Chapter 5\|Chapter 5]] \| TBC		[[Not Dead Yet - Chapter 1\|Chapter 1]] \| [[Not Dead Yet - Chapter 2\|Chapter 2]] \| [[Not Dead Yet - Chapter 3\|Chapter 3]] \| [[Not Dead Yet - Chapter 4\|Chapter 4]] \| [[Not Dead Yet - Chapter 5\|Chapter 5]] \| TBC

@@ Line 232: / Line 232: @@
 Talur helped Nabal to his feet, as Raain and Griegg helped Turvin into the main barroom to take a seat. Arun brought him an ale and plate of elk meat from the elk at the Sanctuary.
-Tedd sat down across the table from Turvin, "You said something about the water and forest being poisoned? As great as it is that the hhorq aren't a threat, poisoned water is.
+Tedd sat down across the table from Turvin, "You said something about the water and forest being poisoned? As great as it is that the hhorq aren't a threat, poisoned water is."
 "It's the river coming in from Taulav," Turvin began, though the locals knew it must be, that's where the hhorq stayed. "I don't know how far upstream, but above the Falls, for sure." The hhorq main camp was at the base of the Falls. "The last hhorq told me as he died laughing, spewing blood."

← Older revision		Revision as of 21:41, 16 September 2022
Line 211:		Line 211:

	"Me? a Landless?!" Arun was starting to feel like suddenly everyone around him was making plans for his future and he was just going to be forced into whatever chaos life was going to throw at him. "I, I never thought about becoming a Landless," Arun lied, he had thought about it and was terrified of the idea of not having a place to call home, of being constantly on the move, of relying on strangers to hopefully honor the Declaration instead of slitting his throat like some places do that don't like being forced to accommodate these ruffians. Landless were viewed often less favorably than Wildlings: similar in poverty as the Landless, but with less travel and more reliance on the land rather than taking from communities they passed through.		"Me? a Landless?!" Arun was starting to feel like suddenly everyone around him was making plans for his future and he was just going to be forced into whatever chaos life was going to throw at him. "I, I never thought about becoming a Landless," Arun lied, he had thought about it and was terrified of the idea of not having a place to call home, of being constantly on the move, of relying on strangers to hopefully honor the Declaration instead of slitting his throat like some places do that don't like being forced to accommodate these ruffians. Landless were viewed often less favorably than Wildlings: similar in poverty as the Landless, but with less travel and more reliance on the land rather than taking from communities they passed through.
		+
		+	"How did you come to be in this condition?" Griegg asked.
		+
		+	"Hhorq," Turvin repliced gravely. He pulled out of his pocket a red cloth, stained in blood, bearing the spiked tree that belonged to the hhorq tribe that for so many decades claimed the lives of the Berryshire, Mayhart, and Oldlake residents, and travelers. There was only one way that Turvin could be in possession of this cloth: "The tribe attacked me as I ran, they are all dead, except the chief, whom fled."
		+
		+	The barroom had gone completely silent as soon as the cloth has been pulled out, but a slow murmur started to grow, and then was suddenly broken with cheers and shouts and applause. This was a victory for the entire valley. Nabal ran out of the bar to ring the bells, shouting as he ran, "The hhorq are dead! A Landless killed them all!"
		+
		+	"I'm sorry the chief got away, I really shouldn't have this."
		+
		+	"He's dead. We killed him a few days ago. I wondered why he was alone," Griegg said, again having his parents' killers killed by a stranger.
		+
		+	"Ohho! You found him, and beat your foe?" Turvin started to hand Griegg the cloth, but Griegg put his hand up in refusal.
		+
		+	"I did not slay him. It was a stranger to this land. You slew the tribe as they attacked you, you overcame overwhelming odds, the victory is yours, keep it. I have not earned it. But thank you."
		+
		+	"You fought them your whole life, I'm sorry the victory was taken from you," Turvin said, putting the cloth back in his pocket, later he would find a way to incorporate it to his armor, as is the Landless tradition.
		+
		+	Nabal came running back into the lodge, and tripping over Turvin's feet, rolled down the hall knocking over a few people that hadn't left with Nabal to go tell their families and neighbors that weren't there for the news of the hhorq threat being eliminated.
		+
		+	Talur helped Nabal to his feet, as Raain and Griegg helped Turvin into the main barroom to take a seat. Arun brought him an ale and plate of elk meat from the elk at the Sanctuary.
		+
		+	Tedd sat down across the table from Turvin, "You said something about the water and forest being poisoned? As great as it is that the hhorq aren't a threat, poisoned water is.
		+
		+	"It's the river coming in from Taulav," Turvin began, though the locals knew it must be, that's where the hhorq stayed. "I don't know how far upstream, but above the Falls, for sure." The hhorq main camp was at the base of the Falls. "The last hhorq told me as he died laughing, spewing blood."
		+
		+	The people around the barrooom were wanting ale to celebrate, but none was being served due to this new concern.
		+
		+	"Quiet! Quiet!" Griegg called to the room, "I know you want to celebrate," cheers went up from the crowd, "but the danger is not over! There's another threat, the threat that drove the hhorq to their run in with Turvin: the river has been poisoned! The Forest of Taulav is dying." This silenced the crowd completely, as silent as Turvin's initial arrival had. Though outside, some celebrations of the hhorq demise could still be heard.
		+
		+	"What are you going to do about it?" Jericho sat down at the table.
		+
		+	Raain glared at him, "Maybe sing to the Temple, you'll be coming."
		+
		+	Jericho laughed, "Me? Oh yes, now you want my voice for magic rather than entertainment."
		+
		+	"Yes, we do want your magic," Griegg said with the sarcasm Raain had.
		+
		+	"Sounds good!" Jericho slammed the table with one paw and downed his ale with the other. Whipping his lips with the back of his paw, he said, "When do we leave?"
		+
		+	"As soon as possible," said Turvin.
		+
		+	Nira tented to Turvin's remaining wounds, Talur took Turvin's armor to the town smithy for repair, Tedd and Arun readied Lemon and the cart, Griegg and Raain discussed plans of route to take to the Falls: whether to follow the river upstream or go around the mountain to the top and straight to Eva's Temple. They decided that having as much information as possible would be best, there was time before the waters got to Berryshiretown and another week before the water reached Oldlake. And they hoped they could avoid seeing the Valswynn.

← Older revision		Revision as of 19:34, 16 May 2021
Line 170:		Line 170:


−	Griegg began frying some thin strips of fatty meat that had been soaking in tula nut syrup overnight, while Talur began cooking eggs.	+	Griegg began frying some thin strips of fatty meat that had been soaking in tula nut syrup overnight, while Talur began cooking the eggs that had rolled down the tracks from the intricate hen nest complex along a side wall. Three rows of ten straw-padded cages along the wall each with a hole through the wall to hen-house on the other side where several of the hens were flying in circles inside before going out to the aviary for a larger flying area.

@@ Line 171: / Line 171: @@
 Griegg began frying some thin strips of fatty meat that had been soaking in tula nut syrup overnight, while Talur began cooking eggs.
+Tedd was too furry to work in the kitchens, and so he joined Raain in setting the tables, while Jericho finished cleaning up the band stage from the welcome home concert the day and night before.
-−
+Over the course of the breakfast period, forty-seven people were served, mostly locals. But near the end of the meal, the doors burst open and stumbled in a tall, beastly hairy creature, gasping as he hit the floor in relief as the healing symbol over the door glowed brighter than it had ever done before. With a great sigh as the glowing sigil faded back to normal, the hairy beast rolled over onto his back, propping himself against the wall opposite the door.
 ----